lovelydog
  • Bài viết: 44
  • Gia nhập: 08-05-2013

Mình hay viết câu dài, nên bị sai nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Cô mình nói viết càng dài càng có nguy cơ. Cô cho mình một chồng bài tập những câu dài sai kiểu này kêu mình sửa. Giờ mình làm thử, các bạn xem và cho mình ý kiến nha. Cám ơn mọi người.

1. There is no doubt that the attraction of video games are catching people’s attraction easily.

-->There is no doubt that the attraction of video games is catching people’s attention easily.

2. In our world today where technologies bound to run in our daily existence, playing video games plays a vital part to our own society.

-->In our world today when technologies bound to run in our daily existence, playing video games plays a vital role inour own society.

3. All RPGs (role-playing games), as the name already suggests, involves the player assuming a character and controlling the entire process and unlock tasks to advance.

-->All RPGs (role-playing games), as the name already suggesting, invovle the player assuming a character and controlling the entire process and unlocking tasks to advance.

4. On the one hand, it is undoubtedly that video games have offered much more benefits to human beings.

-->On the one hand, it is undoubted that video games have offered many more benefits to human beings.

5. I personally believe that video games seem to have noxious implications.

-->Personally, I believe that video games tend to have negative impacts on children's development.

jackichan
  • Bài viết: 29
  • Gia nhập: 08-05-2013
1. No doubt, people are easily attracted by video games.

2. In the today's era, technologies effected our daily life the role of video games in society can not be neglected.

3. All RPGs, as the name indicates the involvement of player in controlling, processing and unlocking tasks to advance.

4. Positively, the video games have been beneficial to human beings.

5. I personally believe that video games have noxious implications.

nhungconduongkyniem
  • Bài viết: 26
  • Gia nhập: 08-05-2013
1. There is no doubt that video games are catching people's attention easily.

2. In our world today when technologies bound to run in our daily existence, video games are playing a vital role in our society.

3. All RPGs (role-playing games), as the name has already suggested, involve the player assuming a character and controlling the entire process and unlocking task to advance.

4. On the one hand, it is undoubted that video games have offered much more benefits to human beings.

5. I personally believe that video games seem to have some noxious influences.

peace
  • Bài viết: 23
  • Gia nhập: 25-06-2013

Chào lovelydog, chào mọi người,

Mình mới gia nhập diễn đàn, thấy rất hữu ích, mình cũng muốn tham gia với mọi người. Mong mọi người ủng hộ.

Mấy câu của bạn mình sửa thế này nè:

1.The video games are catching people’s attention easily.

2.The video games plays a vital part to our own society where technologies are bounded to run in our daily basis.

3.All RPGs involve the player assuming a character and controlling the entire process and unlock tasks to advance.

4.It is undoubted that video games have offered much more benefits to human beings.

5.I believe that video games are likely to have noxious implications.

simba
  • Bài viết: 57
  • Gia nhập: 08-05-2013

Đây là ý kiến của mình.

1. There is no doubt that video games can attract people easily.

2. Today when technology is already a part of our daily lives, playing video games becomes a new trend in our own society.

3. In all role-playing games, the player assumes a character, controls the entire process and unlocks tasks to advance.

4. On the one hand, there is no doubt that video games have offered more benefits to people.

4. I personally agree that video games may have noxious implications.

hummingbird
  • Bài viết: 211
  • Gia nhập: 10-05-2013
Mình đã cố gắng viết lại cho ngắn gọn và giữ cho nó mang tính tự nhiên. Bạn xem tham khảo nha lovelydog.

1. It is true that video games are extremely popular with many people.

2. In today's world, technology is all around us, and video games have become a normal part of our daily lives.

3. Role-playing games involve the player assuming a character, controlling the narrative, and completing tasks in order to advance.

4. On the one hand, playing video games can certainly be a positive experience.

5. I personally believe that video games have a harmful impact on those who play them.


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